（1）Reading is an important part of our lives it is hard to imagine it can be replaced.（2010.1）
应改为：Reading is an important part of our lives.It is hard to imagine it can be replaced./It is hard to imagine reading can be replaced as it is an important part of our lives.
（2）There is a very beautiful garden on campus，that is my favorite spot.（2009.10）
应改为：There is a very beautiful garden on campus，which is my favorite spot./ There is a very beautiful garden on campus.That is my favorite spot.
（3）Do your homework first，you may go out to play football.（2009.1）
应改为：Do your homework first.Then you may go out to play football.
（4）In summer，Juanna didn’t love traveling in Rome she felt it was too hot there.（2008.10）
应改为：In summer，Juanna didn’t love traveling in Rome.She felt it was too hot there./In summer，Juanna didn’t love traveling in Rome because she felt it was too hot there.
（5）I am very tired this evening，it was a long day at the office.（2008.1）
应改为：I am very tired this evening.It was a long day at the office./ I am very tired this evening after a long day at the office.
（1）Before the widespread use of the Internet.There was no universal way to download new reading materials.（2010.1）
应改为：Before the widespread use of the Internet，there was no universal way to download new reading materials.
（2）Without low-cost transportation.Millions of Africans have a long walk to their destinations.（2010.1）
应改为：Without low-cost transportation，millions of Africans have a long walk to their destinations.
（3）She closed her eyes.Thinking back through the years of being mother，wife，friend，daughter，and sister.（2009.10）
应改为：She closed her eyes，thinking back through the years of being mother，wife，friend，daughter，and sister.
（4）I could not help looking back at him.Tears streaming down my face.（2009.1）
应改为：I could not help looking back at him，tears streaming down my face.
（5）One of Jenny’s greatest joys in life is eating desserts.Such as milkshake，cookies or strawberry cake.（2008.10）
应改为：One of Jenny’s greatest joys in life is eating desserts such as milkshake，cookies or strawberry cake.
（6）A very powerful story that really puts its message across.（2008.1）
应改为：It is a very powerful story that really puts its message across.